I'm only 3 paragraphs into your season 1.
I have a question, on pivoting the story in the romantic relationship between Anna and Aitrus, do you want all those girls to have company watching that show? And if they have company, would you like those kind iced out by romance to have something to root for in the series? I think the better focal point is Anna's character. The romance only holds value as a conduit for a worthy protagonist. Plus the character traits can keep going to follow through to other books.
A'Gæris, that's The Philospher, I always imagined him like Gargamel.
Ok, again, by using Anna's character as a pivot, we quest into where she decides to save Veovis, and when her character is such a focal point "Just doing the right thing" isn't enough, so here it is
I was imagining Aitrus and Veovis friendship not very good actually. But because D'ni has such healthy traditions, because they are so long lived, and because regulation of energy and stability are so highly valued, both are able to profit from knowing each other, and even enjoy the banter at times. But Veovis completely missing the point of love should be making itself obvious from the weave of his dialogue. He should be pretty much a racist (hmm I was going to say fascist, but Autocorrect felt like joining in) anyway, if he's pretty much a racistfascist, and Anna as a real distaste for Veovis, greater than Aitrus, because she comes from a place where Fascists can be a real threat. Aitrus, the rest of D'ni are tone deaf to Veovis's cruelty. Veovis himself is tone deaf to how much he is exposing about himself by his politicals. The only person besides Anna who sees Veovis's exposure is The Philospher, who sees the risk only, he himself is tone deaf to Veovis's utter selfishness, what will ultimately reveal itself as his Betrayer-ability. This is what kills him.
I think wats going to be a recurring them is eyes.
Aitrus's eyes looking at whatever Age he has to live on for the rest of his days, Anna's eyes , young, looking over the dessert, down into the darkness, out across the golden daylight of D'ni, and old again, at a young Atrus and Flame in the dessert.
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